No One Left To Tell
By
Jordan Dane
By
Jordan Dane
I just finished reading "No One Left To Tell" today. It was the first time I had ever read anything by Jordan Dane. The story was interesting but I got the impression either two people were writing the story or else she was channeling Mickey Spillane. The story didn't flow well. You had wonderful prose mixed in with some statements that stopped the story cold and made you laugh.
For example:
Page 182: "The heat from her skin seduced him. Raven orchestrated his body's reaction with the precision of a symphony conductor. Bellowing with the resonance of a bass drum, his heart pounded his rib cage, the sensation intoxicating."
It didn't fit in with the scene as they were in a hospital waiting room because her partner had been shot. Raven was angry and Christian was suddenly overcome with passion for her. They started making out in the waiting room. I practically dropped the book laughing.
Page 206: " Sam's face had been shaped by his years. Deeply furrowed laugh lines branded him a character. Red hair infused with gray stood on end, defying gravity. She had seen his stern grimace whenever he glowered at a suspect, but that expression melted away completely when he relaxed among friends. Like a stubborn cowlick unwilling to behave, his face sprang routinely into a crooked smirk."
I can't imagine a face springing anywhere or relating it to a cowlick.
The book was peppered throughout with these kinds of statements. The premise of the story is excellent, but it get very convoluted
From the back cover:
"The body of a brutally slain man is found on the holy grounds of a chapel, and a cryptic message pinned to his chest unravels the lives of people touched by a dark secret. Detective Raven Mackenzie and her partner uncover the dead man's connection to a powerful female crime boss, leading them to her mysterious head of security, Christian Delacorte, who soon becomes the prime suspect. Yet when Raven sifts through Christian's past, she discovers the man is plagued by deeply rooted nightmares - and a shadowy childhood tragedy linking him to the case. Convinced his past holds the key to finding the real killer, she defies her partner, following her gut instincts and trusting her undeniable bond with Christian. But Raven shares her own date with destiny when she crosses paths with a heartless killer. And when he unleashes his rage, there will be no one left to tell."
Sounds interesting, huh! If you can get past the changes in voice and keep with the story, it is a good read. However, I would rate it R for language and violence. There is a sequel to the story, but if it is written the same as this one, I probably won't be reading it.
For example:
Page 182: "The heat from her skin seduced him. Raven orchestrated his body's reaction with the precision of a symphony conductor. Bellowing with the resonance of a bass drum, his heart pounded his rib cage, the sensation intoxicating."
It didn't fit in with the scene as they were in a hospital waiting room because her partner had been shot. Raven was angry and Christian was suddenly overcome with passion for her. They started making out in the waiting room. I practically dropped the book laughing.
Page 206: " Sam's face had been shaped by his years. Deeply furrowed laugh lines branded him a character. Red hair infused with gray stood on end, defying gravity. She had seen his stern grimace whenever he glowered at a suspect, but that expression melted away completely when he relaxed among friends. Like a stubborn cowlick unwilling to behave, his face sprang routinely into a crooked smirk."
I can't imagine a face springing anywhere or relating it to a cowlick.
The book was peppered throughout with these kinds of statements. The premise of the story is excellent, but it get very convoluted
From the back cover:
"The body of a brutally slain man is found on the holy grounds of a chapel, and a cryptic message pinned to his chest unravels the lives of people touched by a dark secret. Detective Raven Mackenzie and her partner uncover the dead man's connection to a powerful female crime boss, leading them to her mysterious head of security, Christian Delacorte, who soon becomes the prime suspect. Yet when Raven sifts through Christian's past, she discovers the man is plagued by deeply rooted nightmares - and a shadowy childhood tragedy linking him to the case. Convinced his past holds the key to finding the real killer, she defies her partner, following her gut instincts and trusting her undeniable bond with Christian. But Raven shares her own date with destiny when she crosses paths with a heartless killer. And when he unleashes his rage, there will be no one left to tell."
Sounds interesting, huh! If you can get past the changes in voice and keep with the story, it is a good read. However, I would rate it R for language and violence. There is a sequel to the story, but if it is written the same as this one, I probably won't be reading it.
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